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One of the poems, there is no way to learn, and there is no way to learn. Scholars, the stones of other mountains can attack jade; The ancients of the ancients were "like a discussion, such as thinking like a grind", so that the gentleman's demeanor is even more extended to be a good learning spirit. Today Yunfan's setting up this column is a place for our exchanges, a place for identification, and a platform for progress.

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Zhou Xiangdong

The ancient suspension spring sounded, and the mountains and mountains were green.

The south wind seemed to be waiting, blowing the green too much.

[Su Jun Comments] Although Wang Jiefu's "green" is used, but the green person is still new. Weiqing and green are slightly heavy.

Cool summer drama

Fang Yuquan

The earth is fried, and the sun is boiling.

The wind is appetizing, and it is already burnt first without frying.

[Su Jun Comments] Shi Yun's opera, not losing the subject. Occasionally, self -sufficiency.

Yongda

Zhang Mingxin

Rizhao Jinhua Luo, the wind blows the jade brocade.

Looking at the mature spikes, the heavier the lower the head.

[Su Jun comment] It is wide. Heavy, a component, the person who is big, so he does not bow his head. One of the loads of life and life had to bow his head. So the words are wide.

Hill

Liao Runchang

Wan Yansong breeze, want to be in the night.

The temple peaks up and down, and the clouds are cut.

The wall cutting is difficult to divide, listening to chickens during the mountain.

Looking for the old traces, the dust network is fascinated.

[Su Jun Comments] The second couplet has weather. Xiao Ying should be Xiao, and the word is owed. The sentence is too flat, and the whole Shiton is reduced.

Afternoon

Horizontal

The floating flowers are too hurried, and the sword has no success.

The small robbery vicissitudes of the ants, the middle -aged mind is carved with insects.

Time enters the wine and grape purple, and the evening fruit is red through frost agate.

In the afternoon, Xiaoyuan was sitting alone, so why ask the West East.

[Su Jun commented] Life feels, hand hand in hand. Calm calm, like a wicked instrument.

Dongmingzhuangziguan

Zhu Xianhua (Shandong)

Half -life wind and rain washing the sky, all the way to the old dust.

Re -travel to Zhuangzuan today, and then recognize the predecessor from the butterfly.

[Wang Hai Liang's comment] Half of life, all the way, today, the predecessor, the real and reality, gradually deduced, and gradually became clear.

Wanyuan Hydashan

Liu Qinglin

Fritillar Dendrobium is covered with rain cigarettes, and gold sculptures are in front of Cai Ping.

The wind blows two kilometers, half in the world and half in heaven.

[Wang Hai Liang's comment] I couldn't help thinking of Mr. Liu Zhang's "flower half mountains, grass half mountains, Baiyun half of the goat, and the birds flew into the sky", like light ink landscape. This first ink is heavy, and it is more like oil painting.

Fuji Miscellaneous

Wang Liansheng

Breeding all things Lai Yanhe, who chant the soil song in this life.

There are heavy rain in the summer, although Qingguang does not need much.

[Wang Hai Liang Comments] Meaning of Nongnong. "Although Qingguang does not need more", returning to personal wishes seems to fail to continue to hit the soil song.

Cute the Zen Temple of Lingquan in Jiaoshan

Xiongdong

Avoiding red dust is also fast, three times in ten years.

The League follows the Old Testament and the same load, and the foreigners are in the stone moss.

Hengdao guided from Mengtian. I listened to the Buddha's arrangement for the rest of my life.

Ordinary grass and trees are working hard, and they do not need to plant them.

[Wang Hai Liang's comment] Zen Zen heart is born, but still chic. "Hengdao guidance from Mengtian, I listened to the Buddha's arrangement for the rest of my life." Heavenly Taoism, everything has its own arrangements, but it is just a grudge to speak by Buddha.

Reading "Jihai Miscellaneous Poems"

Zhao Yimao (Shanxi)

Ling Yunjian Qi beauty flute, the madness of the troubled times is lonely.

Without exhibition, Qing Haiyu, He Kanjiaguo turned to depression.

The sadness in the eyes, the redness of the redness in the pen.

The hidden traces of Pinghu are in the past, Qiulai has to be tide in Zhejiang.

[Wang Hai Liang Comments] All use the image of the poetry of Dingyu, to turn the gloomy, freely clear.

Park is the vision

Jiang Changdian

In the first day, Gao Lin, the young cicada sang the wonderful sound.

The gazebo is three or five old, talking and laughing up.

[Zhou Xiangdong Comments] The sentence uses Chang Jianpo Mountain Temple to form a sentence, which is a bit casual. Three or four sentences should be a positive look, and it should also be a retirement of organs or career. For example, the increase in ordinary employees has limited increase, but the insurance premiums have been increased again. The gap between the officials and the people is so huge, and the fortune of non -country! Reading this poem, restlessness.

Yongtian Jinghu

Ye Mengxia

A mirror is bright, and the moonlight is new.

The fish swimming in the silver and Han moved to catch the stars.

[Zhou Xiangdong Comments] Word of speaking into the poem. There is a dynamic interest, and the regret is a little natural.

Sanya and Xiong Dong Yin lived in the same room, smelled snoring at night, and gave up in the morning.

Star man

Tianya accompany the monarch, and the faint thunder charm is new.

I still hated less overnight, and I was envious of Mrs. Mrs. in this life.

[Zhou Xiangdong Comments] The play is fun. However, this fun is not really interesting, love house and Wu also. Three or four sentences are ironic? Ridicule? It seems all right. I didn't sleep overnight, I heard the snoring sound, and I couldn't bear it, and I wrote it with a wonderful voice. The last sentence is one more layer, which is unbearable.

One of the two quatrains of the plaque of a famous building in a scenic area

Yang Yiming

Society is harmonious and harmonious. What is the plaque of Steel?

The inscription of celebrities is difficult to maintain stability, and there are many crooked scatters in the east.

[Zhou Xiangdong Comments] Yi Lao's poem, more resignation. This is also the color of the person. Celebrities 'inscriptions, since ancient times, officials' inscriptions are cheap and cautious. The scenic area is easy to waste. When repaired in time, avoid the poem population tongue and play on topics.

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Li Yunhua

Gradually, the Qing Shang was close, and Gaocheng was so chaotic.

I invaded the dream of the lacquer garden and entered the sunset.

The road dust dropped, and the rivers and mountains were suspended.

Xiao Zhai listened to the noise, and a leaf across the window.

[Zhou Xiangdong Comments] The whole beginning of autumn is coming. Slowly, it's not excited. In front of the window, know the autumn, wonderful. The charm is quite smooth. However, it is easy to misunderstand from the cicada to the dream of lacquer garden. The lacquer garden dream is on the sunset, and it becomes a one -eyed dragon with a classic. Diagram

Zhou Xiangdong

The ancient suspension spring sounded, and the mountains and mountains were green.

The south wind seemed to be waiting, blowing the green too much.

[Begonia Comment] The word is about to be philosophy, and the word is sophisticated. "Blowing the Green Sutra" is better than the "Spring Breeze and the South Bank of the Green River".

Listen to Zen

Wooden

No one arrived in the mountain temple, Songfeng was settled.

I don't know where to crush the sound of stone spring.

[Begonia Comment] "Crusted" is proper. In the middle of the settings, I only felt pine wind, but Wen Quanshui rinsing the stone. Lao Du's "want to smell the morning bell, it makes people deeply province".

Jour

Zhang Mingxin

The forest is oblique, and the fragrant bones have returned home.

Butterfly fluttered the bee around, and missed the traveler.

[Begonia Comment] "Fresh" is very interesting, and the predecessors have never said. It is reasonable and unreasonable. The flower -viewing women's flowers are exhibited, and the flowers are gorgeous, and they come out with the word "movement".

Summer day

Jia Jianming

The sky was shot in the sky, and Rongcheng ignited the furnace.

Huaihua tears is hot and sprinkled with a snow shop.

[Begonia Comment] The imagination of Huaihua is very novel. The poets often have pity, and they write about flowers and pity. Only "Rongcheng Midsummer Burning Furnace" is not tame. The first two sentences are not only paved, and it is advisable to modify it slightly.

Summer Rain

Orchestra

Mo Mo Yin Yunxiao was unknown, and the wind and rain in front of the building was like leaving.

Seeing the curtains under the West Bridge, the turbidity rising Qingwu Bank was flat.

[Begonia Comment] This is never the Tang Dynasty. Today's quatrains are mostly won with new sentences.

Cute the Zen Temple of Lingquan in Jiaoshan

Xiongdong

Avoiding red dust is also fast, three times in ten years.

The League follows the Old Testament and the same load, and the foreigners are in the stone moss.

Hengdao guided from Mengtian. I listened to the Buddha's arrangement for the rest of my life.

Ordinary grass and trees are working hard, and they do not need to plant them.

[Begonia Comment] Xue Shi has a deep writing capacity, seeing arrangements everywhere, seeing Zen. The better the later. "Standbook" is closely linked to "rearracking", and "remember" really wonderful. Trinity turns into discussions, novel and stable. The tail couplet is the best, it seems to be idle, but it is a deepening of discussion. Because the snow division is unusual and is not for fame and fortune, he can live healthy and longevity. The realm is high, which is more than direct discussion.

Times Songzi Penglong old question asked Gengzhai

Yao Quan's name

Young Jingjiang is talented, but the turbines are like ancient people.

Tao Yuanliang, Holy Poetry Network, Yongliu Lake He Jizhen.

I did not use the garden field to use the instrumental industry, and I wanted to use the text to poison the dust.

Shacun Yile is enjoying it alone, and the rainy night adds lights.

[Begonia Comment] "Rainy Night Add Lantern Lands and Ready God" made me a shot. Few seven -character outlines the lively situation. "Night Rain Autumn Lights", "Zi Boxu", "Reading Caotang Notes" is suitable for playing with the rainy night light. There is a story in "Notes", and everyone is sitting on the night and the poem of ghosts. I still remember that "the sound of the ape was broken, the human language was deep in the smoke", "the moss marks invaded the sick couch, the rain entered the fainting light", the "Daishan deep line per day", "the waste garden to find the spring butterfly soul". This poem is also like a story.

Jiangcun

Liu Wujun

The Izon Tower hangs the day, and the bamboo forest is horizontal.

Inu Mingyu women came out, and Xikou took the boat.

[Ban Yin Lu Dianzhan] The words are rigorous and elected. Not only is the picture full of picture, but also elegant mood and peace. Good means.

Listen to Zen

Wooden

No one arrived in the mountain temple, Songfeng was settled.

I don't know where to crush the sound of stone spring.

[Ban Yin Lu comment] No one arrives at the temple. However, the word is slightly heavy.

Lake

Liu Luning

Shuangdi Yan Liu Yin Qingzhou, Chunyu leisurely leaning on the building.

Only preparations for Xuan Xuan and lake pen, and ink in the world in Hangzhou.

[Ban Yin Lu Dian Jian] The conclusion is strange, and the poetry is all out. The first two sentences are not idle.

Summer heat

Wan Wan (Anhui)

In the summer, there is a Mozhuang in Xhai.

The king's wind rose, Xie Nu chanted in Tibet.

Wash the hibiscus water, Xiangsheng Lili Wall.

Living in peace and peace, the heart is quiet and cool.

[Ban Yin Lu Dian] The Lianlian Code is more natural. The neck couplet is slightly heavier. The sentence is slightly less than justice. Can be held.

Half -hidden Lu, real name Meng Xiangrong, Chu people live in Guangdong, university professor.

Half -hidden Lu, real name Meng Xiangrong, Chu people live in Guangdong, university professor. He is currently serving as a poetry of Yunfan Poetry Association.

Zhou Xiangdong

The owner of Laoshan, the real name Zhou Xiangdong, was born in 68 years. Calligraphy and painters are Mr. Wang Zhenduo from Yu Shan; Poetry Merchants Mr. Wang Yan Kancan; Western painting, theoristian Mr. Wang Lin, also good at poetry, comments, etc.

Wang Hailiang

Wang Hailiang, born in 1974, from Hebei. Members of Shi Shi Shi Shi, Fenglong Poetry Society, and a half -acre Tang Poetry Society. The works are found in "Poetry", "Chinese Poetry", "Chinese Ci Fu", "Contemporary Poems" and so on.

Su Jun

Su Jun, No. Shi Zhai, Cantonese. He is currently the director of the review department of the Ninth Cultural Research Institute and the mentor of the New News Agency. Poetry and poetry have won more than a thousand national awards. He has been the judge of the final trial of the National Poetry Contest. There are many books such as "Shiti Zhaibu and Gong Dingji's Miscellaneous Poems", "Stone Tu Gengzi Ci", and "Eighteen Songs of Songs".

Begonia

Tang Yanyu, Xiaoyao Begonia, Zhai Xiaohu Fairy Pavilion. The world lives in Jinling, post -90s, poet, doctor of literature, and concurrently compiled the poems of Yunfan Poetry Association.

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