Student masterpieces ｜ Master's comment: Welcome to the wind

As a photography, the teacher and I followed the whole process and recorded the construction of the Antarctic Kunlun Station in my country.

After the harsh training, we went to the Antarctica with the Chinese polar inspection boat Snow Dragon, and witnessed the establishment of this scientific research station that stood up to the wind.

After many twists and turns, we crossed the devil's west wind belt, and the Cedar began its ice navigation trip. The vast floating ice belt floated on the sea, and the ice was condensed into a piece of flowing with waves, like a piece of floating oil on the cold bone soup.

In the lower cabin, you can clearly see the white ice rolling beside you. The wheels rolled up the thick white snow, wrapped in the ice grains, and slapped on the observation window on the side of the body violently. Where the ice -breaking boat passed by, leaving a clear trace of ice, the ice -floating retreat, and the blue and black seawater rolled up. The snow fluttered on the hip -up body, as if applying a red makeup to the red paint. The crew trotted between the various cabins, exchanging various data, and planning the optimal route.

The wind and snow were long.

A week later, the Cedar arrived at Zhongshan Station.

Everyone started to get busy immediately. The scientific research team members were busy checking the building materials. They found that a material had reached the limit and quickly looked for replaceable materials with the staff stationed at Zhongshan Station. After two days of repair, the Caterpillar Snow car, which weighed 23 tons, dragged 15 tons of snowboxes and began to climb up in the ice field. The gear wheel is ground on the ice, making a huge click. I sat next to a snowbox and watched the snowstock raised from the ground, listening to the roar of the engine, and shocked this majestic driving force. When shooting, you must take off your goggles, but see that the eyes are gray and vast, and the world is killed. The wind and snow are on the way, long, and the only way to let me know where I was beating on the latitude and weft.

It was a few days of snowstand. We finally arrived at the ice dome marked by the red pen on the map. People are wearing heavy red and black protective clothing and carefully carry the building materials. The two stood on the box, struggled to hold a cylindrical container, and then rolled it out of the car. One person's tall cylinder fell on the snow. They jumped down and kneeled on the snow carefully, rolling the cylinder forward. Just kneel in the whole journey. The distance of hundreds of meters, the snow and snow with the face, walked for half an hour.

The construction of Kunlun Station is conducted in an orderly manner.

When I returned, I sat on the snow car and looked back at the vast ice field. A scientific research station that has been initially applied to the scale, squatting on the reckless snowfield, stands on the wind, and announces silently to declare the enthusiasm and tenacity of the Chinese exploring the polar. In the eternal storm, I saw the long journey of the Antarctic scientific research in my country, full of glittering.

(The author is a student in Shanghai Jincai North School)

Use the material to show an extraordinary pattern

What is "standing in the wind"? A posture, a kind of emotion, a spirit ... and the small author of this composition, the angle of the selection of the material is quite clever. It describes the wind of Kunlun Station and scientific research staff with the tone and seeing of the photographer. The content is well done.

Secondly, a major feature of this composition is a unique perspective and described. As a photographer, the little author selected three fragments on the way to "Zhongshan Station", "Zhongshan Station", and "Kunlun Station". The "enthusiasm" and "toughness" of the environment; more skillful description, the metaphor of ice -floating life, the description of the water rollover, and the states of the snow car climb, all make readers feel fear and difficulty, so it can be very good. The status and unyielding spirit of the science exam team members "standing in the wind".

This article not only shows the broader vision and extraordinary pattern of the small author in the selection of materials and intentions, but also shows the solid skills of the small author in the text. Of course, if you can describe the establishment of the "Kunlun Station" in the process of description, it is even better.

Guest introduction

Zheng Mingdong, a master of Chinese middle schools in Pudong New Area in Shanghai, and a person who has worked part -time in the new district junior high school language teaching and researchers. He has won the first prize of Chinese and young Chinese teaching and design in Pudong New Area.

Source: "Language News · Eighth Grade Edition"

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